HELP PLZ w/ Ghandi THesis!!!

[nissanrider06 10+ year member]

ANYONE good in english class, im sure your better than me, i need to come up with a thesis for a paper on ghandi

its a basic essay with intro body and conclusion (mostlikely more than 3 body paragraphs teacer said) NOTES: your essay will be based on ghandi, however, you will determine the focus of your paper.

topics may innclude:

-ghandis personal deelopment as a leader

- strategies/philosophies used by ghandhi and their effectiveness in accomplishing his goals in south africa and/or india.

-glbal impact of ghandhis methods of non-violent non-cooperation.

-ghandhis identity with the poor/untouchables

this is what i got so far

ghandhi was a unique man, he showed people how they could overcome obsticles and make a differance without using violence. He led by example, he was a great leader and role-midel for india and he made a differance through-out india and the world.

but any suggestions would be great //content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/naughty.gif.94359f346c0f1259df8038d60b41863e.gif

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[faulkton 5,000+ posts]

ANYONE good in english class, im sure your better than me, i need to come up with a thesis for a paper on ghandi
its a basic essay with intro body and conclusion (mostlikely more than 3 body paragraphs teacer said) NOTES: your essay will be based on ghandi, however, you will determine the focus of your paper.

topics may innclude:

-ghandis personal deelopment as a leader

- strategies/philosophies used by ghandhi and their effectiveness in accomplishing his goals in south africa and/or india.

-glbal impact of ghandhis methods of non-violent non-cooperation.

-ghandhis identity with the poor/untouchables

this is what i got so far

ghandhi was a unique man, he showed people how they could overcome obsticles and make a differance without using violence. He led by example, he was a great leader and role-midel for india and he made a differance through-out india and the world.

but any suggestions would be great //content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/naughty.gif.94359f346c0f1259df8038d60b41863e.gif

start by using spell check. Then it seems like you used 'he' to much. Rephrase some of that shit. I would do the paper on the development as a leader. Go here and choose one event for the early, middle and late in his life..there is your 3 main paragraphs.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ghandi

do you have to cite anything?

 

[AcidicDreams 10+ year member]

start by using spell check. Then it seems like you used 'he' to much. Rephrase some of that shit. I would do the paper on the development as a leader. Go here and choose one event for the early, middle and late in his life..there is your 3 main paragraphs.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ghandi

do you have to cite anything?

couldn't have said it better myself...

the use of the same word over and over is a pet peeve of mine...

try writing that, if you post it (the word file) I might review it for you... I won't touch your works cited if you have it though...

 

[Cobra Commander 10+ year member]

Here is a moderate level thesis that I came up with. If you are in college, you may be required to have a more "complex" one. LMK

- Cobra Commander

Thesis:

Mahatma Ghandi, a dedicated humanitarian and leader, was one of the most influential persons of our time.

Further information:

http://www.mkgandhi.org/index.htm

 

[Eugenics 5,000+ posts]

there was a great episode of bullshit on him, i can probably get it for you if you want

 

[sumone 10+ year member]

ghandhi was a unique man, he showed people how they could overcome obsticles and make a differance without using violence. He led by example, he was a great leader and role-midel for india and he made a differance through-out india and the world.

With a thesis like that, you're assuming we already know who "Ghandi" is. Although most people would know, it was always understood in my English class that you can't make assumptions on the reader's knowledge.

Too much "he" as mentioned; decrease your usage of pronouns and increase your usage of nouns and other replacements. For example, remove all instances of "he" that doesn't initiate a sentence, and see how it sounds.

That's a very broad thesis as well. Let me rephrase; it's not necessarily broad, it's just too many different factors thrown in. You want something that will sum them up into a short, concise statement, and then expand on those factors throughout the essay.

Whenever you write an essay with multiple topics to choose from, you mainly choose the one you think you can explain the best....or can explain enough so that you meet the teacher's X pages requirement....

Good luck.

 

[OdieTRP 10+ year member]

Our country is so screwed...

 

[nissanrider06 10+ year member]

yea it is kind of broad but i need 5 pages, and the spell check thing says i have to DL something plus it was 12 in the morning and i was tired as fuk, but anyways yea thanks that helps alot,

Mahatma Ghandi, a dedicated humanitarian and leader, was one of the most influential persons of our time.

I could see that as a good start, but im not sure i could get 3+ body paragraphs out of that. also any ideas on an attention getter. thanks this helps sooooo much!

 

[nissanrider06 10+ year member]

Mahatma Ghandi, a dedicated humanitarian (write about his philosophies and how they worked better than violence) and leader (write about his development as a leader), was one of the most influential persons of our time (write about his accomplishments).

Maybe that would work? still could use a little advice on the intro though...

 

[Cobra Commander 10+ year member]

The way you have it broken down seems like it a good start.

Next, form your conclusion/closing paragraph, then the body and then your introduction. This works for me b/c I cant do anything in order, but if you are a sequential person, form your intro and proceed.

Keep this in mind;

1. Summarize what you are going to talk about.

2. Talk about it.

3. Summarize what you talked about.

- Cobra Commander

 

[Wonderbread 5,000+ posts]

That's a crappy thesis, no offence.

Remember that a thesis is supposed to basically be the point you are trying to prove/demonstrate throughout your paper.

 

[Z71999 10+ year member]

id write some background on him (he grew up and was reared by x) for the first like 6-7 sentences then tell what he did

 

[nissanrider06 10+ year member]

That's a crappy thesis, no offence.
Remember that a thesis is supposed to basically be the point you are trying to prove/demonstrate throughout your paper.

well i was gonna talk about how he was a humanitarian, leader and his accomplishments, thanks for the post but can u be a little more specific?

 

[Wonderbread 5,000+ posts]

Do you have an argument? A point that you want to come to?

 

[nissanrider06 10+ year member]

no, think im just gonna prove my theseis, im starting it now