st8 spittin

[limitkid7 5,000+ posts]

**** i thought everyone had them now?????????
no seriously i dont ask u to understand my rhymes, just some critique from anyone who wants to criticize or complement...

but i do understand what your sayin in your rhymes...basically because u repeat yourself sayin your a killa and a pimp in every rhyme.... //content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/veryexcited.gif.c26a15f316d23068607f36ddacd7a7ab.gif

ok 3 things to point out......

1 - i didn't ask u to analyze anything of mine

2 - please show me where i've said i'm a pimp

3 - how u gonna ask somone to talk about ur stuff then get offended about it

 

[pj_chevy03 10+ year member]

ok 3 things to point out......1 - i didn't ask u to analyze anything of mine

2 - please show me where i've said i'm a pimp

3 - how u gonna ask somone to talk about ur stuff then get offended about it

1st off i can talk about/critique your rhymes because basically thats what this thread is about: showin off your rhymin skills and lettin other people see them and diss them or compliment them. If it wasnt about that i could just write mine in a notebook where no one would read them.

2nd off, you never actually say "i'm a pimp", but you imply it in every rhyme by sayin i'll **** ya mama,sister,cousin's niece, your mama's aunt' niece, and ya grandaddys' baby girl or either u ride off in a car with some other killa's hoe.

3rd off i was not offended, i just didnt, and still dont, see what you are trying to say by "i just dont have a light bulb". i did not write it in an offensive or serious tone hence the veryexcited.

 

[limitkid7 5,000+ posts]

1st off i can talk about/critique your rhymes because basically thats what this thread is about: showin off your rhymin skills and lettin other people see them and diss them or compliment them. If it wasnt about that i could just write mine in a notebook where no one would read them.
2nd off, you never actually say "i'm a pimp", but you imply it in every rhyme by sayin i'll **** ya mama,sister,cousin's niece, your mama's aunt' niece, and ya grandaddys' baby girl or either u ride off in a car with some other killa's hoe.

3rd off i was not offended, i just didnt, and still dont, see what you are trying to say by "i just dont have a light bulb". i did not write it in an offensive or serious tone hence the veryexcited.

imply what - man its a fukin rap calm down..... basically i was responding to ur stuff to try to start a battle now have u pitch a ***** fit....

 

[pj_chevy03 10+ year member]

basically i was responding to ur stuff to try to start a battle

why didnt u say so?

as tech nine says..."now its on"

i dont feel like writin one now, but lata maybe tommorrow its on...

 

[squeak9798 5,000+ posts]

my wife/ ya motha / u tried/ i f* herhad u and now ya little brotha

destroyed them both and now u runnin 4 cover

What the fuck?

You call that a "dis"

You're about to learn

That you can't fuck with this

First I'll find your sister

On the corner that she works

I ask how much

"$50", then proceeds to flirt

I play along for a while,

Then grab her by the hair

Throw the bitch in the back

of my '65 Corvair

Screamin' for her life,

She finally made me flip

"Shut the fuck up

before I kill you, nasty trick!"

Find a country road

Pull over to the side

Run my hands up her skirt

And pull her pussy open wide

Then I stuck it in,

All 10 inches

Hoe is so loose

that she wasn't even flinchin'

Finally bust a nut,

Right on her nasty face

She starts drinkin' the shit

Like it was damn Smirnnoff Ice

Completely grossed out,

I reach up front and grab my knife

Finally do the deed,

I'd been waitin' for the whole night

Pull her out the car,

And over to the ditch

"Enjoy your final moments,

You skanky fuckin' bitch,

Don't worry though,

Soon you'll see your mother,

And when I'm done with her,

I'll move on to your brother,

This is his shit,

He's the cause of your demise,

For being such a smartass,

For thinkin' he is wise"

Then she starts praying

Like God will stop my actions

She's on her hands and knees

Awaiting His decision

The prayer fell on deaf ears

And I maintained my position

Pulled her head back,

Ran the blade across her throat

The bitch starts convulsing,

While blood's staining her coat

I stand there and smile

That's one down

And holy shit that was fun,

Can't wait till limitkid's found //content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/satan.gif.9c6a335ed7aeeed3ee273e573f1fcaac.gif

To be continued...............

 

[Gauntlet 5,000+ posts]

You're like a poor man's Necro.

 

[squeak9798 5,000+ posts]

You're like a poor man's Necro.

Me?? Is that a good thing or a bad thing........LOL

 

[limitkid7 5,000+ posts]

What the fuck?You call that a "dis"

You're about to learn

That you can't fuck with this

First I'll find your sister

On the corner that she works

I ask how much

"$50", then proceeds to flirt

I play along for a while,

Then grab her by the hair

Throw the bitch in the back

of my '65 Corvair

Screamin' for her life,

She finally made me flip

"Shut the fuck up

before I kill you, nasty trick!"

Find a country road

Pull over to the side

Run my hands up her skirt

And pull her pussy open wide

Then I stuck it in,

All 10 inches

Hoe is so loose

that she wasn't even flinchin'

Finally bust a nut,

Right on her nasty face

She starts drinkin' the shit

Like it was damn Smirnnoff Ice

Completely grossed out,

I reach up front and grab my knife

Finally do the deed,

I'd been waitin' for the whole night

Pull her out the car,

And over to the ditch

"Enjoy your final moments,

You skanky fuckin' bitch,

Don't worry though,

Soon you'll see your mother,

And when I'm done with her,

I'll move on to your brother,

This is his shit,

He's the cause of your demise,

For being such a smartass,

For thinkin' he is wise"

Then she starts praying

Like God will stop my actions

She's on her hands and knees

Awaiting His decision

The prayer fell on deaf ears

And I maintained my position

Pulled her head back,

Ran the blade across her throat

The bitch starts convulsing,

While blood's staining her coat

I stand there and smile

That's one down

And holy shit that was fun,

Can't wait till limitkid's found //content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/satan.gif.9c6a335ed7aeeed3ee273e573f1fcaac.gif

To be continued...............

i know you don't really want me to reply to that //content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/imdaman.gif.bc6c552e19aa4ad8c47461144f40eb1a.gif

 

[limitkid7 5,000+ posts]

since i must here goes......

first i read ur rap, i replied to you talkin shyt to see what you'd bring back

read the first verse and i too could sit here and curse

but why the FUk would i do that

Its not like this is 2 years ago when me and gauntlet were trapped

its me and u, well really its just me -u just got ur neck snapped

layin their on the floor helpless full of hate

i could kick u in the side but i'm too busy lookin for my next bait

just know that when u decide to write somethin else

direct it @ all but the one that can make even u hate urself

hate the fact u posted on st8 spittin

hate the fact that u just got ate up by the limit

and now that you've met my 9

i'm writin 3 more rhymes to complete my hit list

with a name like squeak

u'll never have a winning streak

enter the battle and watch limit get unique

i'll make up words ur momma couldn't speak

but how could she - when she's perfectin the techinque

can't wait until limit's found

 

[squeak9798 5,000+ posts]

since i must here goes......
first i read ur rap, i replied to you talkin shyt to see what you'd bring back

read the first verse and i too could sit here and curse

but why the FUk would i do that

Its not like this is 2 years ago when me and gauntlet were trapped

its me and u, well really its just me -u just got ur neck snapped

layin their on the floor helpless full of hate

i could kick u in the side but i'm too busy lookin for my next bait

just know that when u decide to write somethin else

direct it @ all but the one that can make even u hate urself

hate the fact u posted on st8 spittin

hate the fact that u just got ate up by the limit

and now that you've met my 9

i'm writin 3 more rhymes to complete my hit list

with a name like squeak

u'll never have a winning streak

enter the battle and watch limit get unique

i'll make up words ur momma couldn't speak

but how could she - when she's perfectin the techinque

Hate to be the one to tell you

That your rhymes don't make sense

Constantly jumping and switching

From one topic to the next

You need to work on smooth transitions

As well as maintaining a constant rhythm

But hey, it's not your fault

You just don't have it, and it can't be taught

That's why I've been takin' it easy on you

Don't wanna make it too challenging or

You'll start having seizures and turning blue

You can't handle it mentally

You simply

Don't possess the ability

To hang with me lyrically

Taking my time and constantly

Breaking you down methodically

You're writings are an autrosity

I'm far superior intellectually

And in this jungle

we call life

As well as in this

rythmic strife

I'm the lion

You're the prey

Running and hiding

To live another day

As I stand strong

Upon the hill

You're weak and feable

And have just been killed

You may have tried as

Hard as you can

But you're still nothing more

than my sacrificial lamb

 

[rx7vert 10+ year member]

to bad i have the rhyming skills of GW bush on a bad day.....

 

[pj_chevy03 10+ year member]

simplify this game, write the rules, show no shame

you're the ****in reason everyone has come to call u lame

it aint ya mama, aint ya sista, aint ya dad who brought you down

i took ya out without a struggle, now from your mouth there aint a sound

made you drown in your shit, the shit u spit that no one gets

i'ma make u fall and see you crawl in the ****in fiery pits

but you dont get it, cuz your limit

like a bulb, your brain you dim it

dont you represent the killas, prove it then, why dont u film it

show you kill these ones u claim

show you dont fake this killa game

show you laughin in the face of those u filled their eyes with pain

but i guess we'll never see it

cuz this shit u spit, we dont believe it

if ya gonna fake ya raps, tell ya mind and dont decieve it...*****

 

[PV Audio 5,000+ posts]

warren your "flows" are just awful. its stereotypical black rapping about *****z and hoes and cash. write something meaningful in prose, but i can see that you don't have the skills necessary to make a compound complex sentence

 

[jemorgan85 10+ year member]

Call me the seeker, taunting with my lyrical figure

Bound by time, I'm destined to simply rhyme and configure

A style so precious even John Paul would have to praise me

While these cats rap lazy, I send my crazy prose squadron for the hazing

Determined as the winner, my flow bests the tides of weather

Turning my pain into audible pleasure shows the measure of my bars so clever

People ***** about nothing, get their high off of annoying others

Those who act like ****ers have tongues fat like Sally Struthers

Kill them all, I'll slit their throats with this lyrical barrage of missiles

Disposed and confused, pergatory opens up for these fickles

Like Juvenile you're tongue cries when you start to flow ha

So end your shit now, before banishment is your agenda

 

[limitkid7 5,000+ posts]

warren your "flows" are just awful. its stereotypical black rapping about *****z and hoes and cash. write something meaningful in prose, but i can see that you don't have the skills necessary to make a compound complex sentence

how about this, i'll say something simple since i seem to not be able to say complex shyt.....

let me think for a second.............

:boobies: sorry that's all that came to mind.......

"get on my pay level then talk - until then, you can write as much complex shyt you like......."