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This paper isn't due until tomorow at 7PM but I have work tomorow so I'm tyring to get it all cleaned up today. If anyone could proofread it and see if theres any errors I'd greatly appreciate it.

The assignment is:

That time of year thou mayst in me behold

When yellow leaves, or none, or few, do hang

Upon those boughs which shake against the cold,

Bare ruined choirs, where late the sweet birds sang.

In me thou see'st the twilight of such day

As after sunset fadeth in the west;

Which by and by black night doth take away,

Death's second self, that seals up all in rest.

In me thou see'st the glowing of such fire,

That on the ashes of his youth doth lie,

As the death-bed, whereon it must expire,

Consumed with that which it was nourish'd by.

This thou perceiv'st, which makes thy love more strong,

To love that well, which thou must leave ere long.

1.(30 pts.) A shakespearean sonnet uses a fixed pattern of rime, meter, and stanzaic development

For each of these three elements you must:

accuratly identify the general pattern, and do so using the appropriate literay terms.

Because the poem's stanzaic development is the most complicated of these elements, its identification must address both form and content.

Refer to specifics--with respective numbers--from the poem as your evidence.

2. (20 pts)Alliteration and Assonance

a. define both terms

using specific evidence from the poem and respective line numbers:

b. Identify one example for each of these devices.

3.(20 pts.) metaphor and Simile

a. Define both terms

using specific evidence from the poem and respective line numbers:

b. Identify one simile and two metaphors in this poem; and for each one you identify, state the precise comparison being made.

4. (30 pts) The Speaker

using specific evidence from the poem and respective line numbers:

a. describe the speakers age and [hysical condition

b. Identify what issues are foremost on the speaker's mind

c. tell me what conclusion the speaker reaches about these concerns at the poem's end.

And finally my essay:

Shakespearian Sonnet

1. a. The rime in a Shakespearian sonnet combines some interesting rhyme schemes. First, the rhyme scheme is ababcdcdefefgg, that is for the first twelve lines every other line rhymes, and in the couplet the lines rhyme with each other.

b. There are fourteen lines in a Shakespearian sonnet, and they are composed of three quatrains and one couplet at the end of the poem. In each line there is five iambic feet, each iambic foot contains one unstressed syllable, followed by a stressed syllable. Each line always has ten syllables.

c. The stanzaic development for this poem starts out with the speaker describing a tree in fall/winter time. How the leaves are almost all gone and the tree is empty. The singing birds have long since left, and the cool winds of fall have arrived. For the second stanza the speaker is talking about how within him you can see the twilight that remains after a sunset, which is closely followed by a black night, or Death’s second self. For the final quatrain, the speaker is showing how he is like a fire in that you can see the remains of a fire on top the ashes of its youth. The fire has to burn out, and in doing that consuming what used to fuel it. The couplet that comes at the end of the poem the speakers says how that the young man will love him stronger because after long he will be gone for good.

2. Alliteration- The repetition of two or more constant sounds in successive words in a line of verse or prose. The alliteration that I found within this sonnet was found in line seven. "Which By and By Black night doth take away" In this alliteration the constant that you keep hearing is a “b” sound.

Assonance- The repetition of two or more vowel sounds in successive words, which creates a kind of rhyme. The assonance that I found in this sonnet was in line three. "Upon those boughs which shake against the cold" When the vowel sound “oh” used so frequently in a short period of time it usually called assonance.

Assonance and Alliteration are pretty close to the same thing, but Alliteration is with constants, and Assonance is with vowel sounds.

3. Metaphor- A statement that one thing is something else, which, in a literal sense it is not. By asserting that a thing is something else, a metaphor creates a close association between the two entities and usually underscores some important similarity between them.

a. In the first quatrain Shakespeare compares himself to a tree in the fall. “That time of year thou mayst in me behold / when yellow leaves, or none, or few, do hang / upon those boughs which shake against the cold" Shakespeare is comparing his aging youth to the aging tree in fall when tree has no leaves and is empty. In the first line of the poem you can see that the speaker is not saying that he actually is aging but that he thinks the young man perceives him as that.

b. In the third quatrain the speaker compares himself to a dying fire. “In me thou see’st the glowing of such fire / That on the ashes of his youth doth lie, / As the deathbed whereon it must expire,” He is showing that the fire that is burning now is atop the ashes of his youth. Like a fire, his passion is slowly dying.

Simile- A comparison of two things, indicated by some connective, usually like, as, than, or a verb such as resembles. A simile usually compares two things that initially seem unlike but are shown to have a significant resemblance.

a. “Bare ruined choirs, where late the sweet birds sang” I believe that this is a simile because the speaker is comparing the tree in the fall without its leaves and no more birds in its limbs singing songs to a abandoned monastery. Most monasteries are made out of wood, like a tree. Also, birds in a tree lined up singing, are like a choir because the singers are usually in a line.

4. The Speaker:

a. The speaker of this poem is in his forties or fifties. His physical condition is painfully obvious, in line ten he comes out and says “That on the ashes of his youth doth lie,” saying that in fact he is no longer a youth and will never be again. Forties or fifties might not sound that old to us, but in Shakespeare’s day that was quite old.

b. I believe that the issues that that the speaker has, is that he is getting older and his youth and passion are dying. I believe that he wants the young man to know that his time will come as well, and that he should value his youth while he has it. I also believe that the speaker thinks that the young man is only seeing his aging, which the speaker is seeing himself. Right from the beginning the reader can tell what is on the speaker’s mind “That time of year thou mayst in me behold/ When yellow leaves, or none, or few, do hang”. You can see that he feels that the younger man only sees his aging. Towards the end of the poem in line ten and eleven “That on the ashes of his youth doth lie, / As the deathbed whereon it must expire,”. This is were he is telling the young man about how his youth and passions will never return.

c. By the end of the poem the speaker has come to the conclusion that his youth and his youthful desires are drawing to an end. The speaker is also trying to tell the young man that in time the same thing will happen to him. No one can remain young forever. “This thou perceiv’st, which makes they love more strong, / To love that well which thou must leave ere long.” That is the final couplet, lines thirteen to fourteen. The speaker is saying that the young man now understands that his youth and passion won’t last forever as well as that the love the speaker will grow because after long he will be gone for good.

Thank you so much if you read this far! I greatly appreciate and and all help offered!

 
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