new song im working on. .

[Deadbeat 10+ year member]

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=25317

First one at the top called tortured. . .tell me if i **** or not

Click to read more...

 

[saywhat? 5,000+ posts]

better than the big bad wolf!!!

lmao not bad.

 

[XtrmAudioCncpts 10+ year member]

your bar breaks should match your musical verses

 

[Deadbeat 10+ year member]

your bar breaks should match your musical verses

explain please?

 

[XtrmAudioCncpts 10+ year member]

your breaks of your lyrics should match the breaks of the verse of the musical part of the song. because it doesnt the beat and lyrics dont match up, causing a song that sounds really good lyrically not to sound so good because the music behind it doesnt match the song your rapping over

i hope this helps you out i dont mean to make you feel like you arent a good artist because the lyrics should be heard because they are good, but they should also flow with the music that powers those lyrics

 

[Echo42987 10+ year member]

I like the beat a lot

 

[Deadbeat 10+ year member]

oh. . so essentially, your saying my flow is off. . hmm. . i work hard on my flow, i usually get more credit for my flow then i do for my lyrics, but ill definately give it more attention next time around. Thanx for the crit

 

[XtrmAudioCncpts 10+ year member]

no problem

 

[Deadbeat 10+ year member]

I like the beat a lot

Its not my beat. . .its from 'Cage - Hells Winter' album. A track titled "Stripes"

 

[DIPayton 10+ year member]

I gotta agree, the beat throws this song off... The beat and lyrics don't flow good. The lyrics are amazing tho, great song. Not all that bad of a flow... just something you might want to work on. It was even good flow towards the end but not consistent. Its even a good beat but not used right for this song.

Overall, still a very good song... The lyrics are tight.

 

[Deadbeat 10+ year member]

I gotta agree, the beat throws this song off... The beat and lyrics don't flow good. The lyrics are amazing tho, great song. Not all that bad of a flow... just something you might want to work on. It was even good flow towards the end but not consistent. Its even a good beat but not used right for this song.
Overall, still a very good song... The lyrics are tight.

k, appreciate the feedback

at least i havent had any tomatoes thrown at me yet lol

 

[swimfreak26 10+ year member]

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Actually, haven't even listened to it yet, but there's a tomato for ya, right in the face!//content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/biggrin.gif.d71a5d36fcbab170f2364c9f2e3946cb.gif

 

[azbass 5,000+ posts]

the beat is cool