Yep, try indenting, put others in front of you, instead of like, "me and my sister" say "my sister and I", I think I saw one of those, I switched it up a bit //content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/wink.gif.608e3ea05f1a9f98611af0861652f8fb.gif
yea, thats one of those things i would have caught once i proof read it. like i said, that was definatly just a rough draft. far from being the final essay