st8 spittin

[jemorgan85 10+ year member]

in the shadow lies the lies of your uncontrolled mentalitythe grass is rendered black and the light is no reality

behind your broken thoughts there's a thought of you're fatality

go pull yourself together cuz the force is like our gravity

dont question what u hear cuz what is heard is not seen

even if u moved your life the shadow moves aint no green

when the sun sets down low the darkness becomes taller

the lies become the mass of the tie that fills the collar

the weight of the deceit is much greater than your mind

memory becomes a ***** and even harder to find

Definitely your best so far.

 

[PV Audio 5,000+ posts]

Definitely your best so far.

i agress 100%. btw, wheres ghs?

 

[PV Audio 5,000+ posts]

troubled pasts come at me like scissorscuttin up my emotions like a sore loser

i like to mystically reveal all the things paining me

in a minute i'll get around to explaining these things i see

plain as day the grass grows greener on the top

not on the other side with out the weeds it'll drop

i wish i could vocally proclaim my lyrical fame

put it on paper like words that never rhyme the same

never repeating and speaking verses like a machine would do

cause i'm mechanicanlly managing the words that i use

eh? :thumbsupw or :thumbsdow

 

[PV Audio 5,000+ posts]

i thought that u said u wanted to physically beat me

but I'll cut u down the middle like a knife in a zucchini

smooth and fast is the way that i flow

like lyrical poison in ur veins making your movements slow

tunnel vison arrives with a sense of unbalance

lyrically assassinating u like a cobra in a trance

fangs reach out like my hand to your throat

same instance still realising your gloats

were nothing to be proud of as you verbally die

some rhymes on here so gay i have to ask "do you smell astroglide?"

 

[LuNaTiC 10+ year member]

my words come at u like murderous assassins

get too close and i'll attack u wit a folded napkin

take in too many words and theyll f*ck u up like purple pills

your wet behind the ears and green like chlorophyll

my words are scary like a horror film

now its your choice take it or leave it

blow snots on your sleeve and let u see it

flow is scarier then the ghosts in your closet

my minds gone crazy and i think i jus lost it

you sound like your hopped up and i hopped off it

so hop in your cauffin, steady your breathe

relax and let jesus take u thru the next step

wat u guys think?

 

[Gauntlet 5,000+ posts]

Your similes and punchlines are rather awful.

 

[pj_chevy03 10+ year member]

buried is the heartbeat that refuses blood supplied

like the ocean when its dark the shore is swallowed by the tide

when refused by the heart the blood runs the vessels dry

the brightness of the water is then darkened by the sky

the buildings on the shore seem to lean like they will die

the sand upon the shore becomes the place that u will lie

when the spoken language of the deep try to carry on

land becomes so lonely no one there but u alone

upon your face of fear the way to go for u is shown

the wind of the emotion picks u up and brings u home

 

[pj_chevy03 10+ year member]

^^^^what about that one...

 

[Gauntlet 5,000+ posts]

Starts off pretty good...the ending is kinda corny though.

 

[PV Audio 5,000+ posts]

my words are scary like a horror film

yes i do not doubt that for a second.

 

[PV Audio 5,000+ posts]

Your similes and punchlines are rather awful.

quite true

10char

 

[pj_chevy03 10+ year member]

Starts off pretty good...the ending is kinda corny though.

yea i agree...jus really didnt know how to end it soooooo...

 

[PV Audio 5,000+ posts]

yea i agree...jus really didnt know how to end it soooooo...

hey dont worry, lunatic wown the all time worst similie award

 

[LuNaTiC 10+ year member]

hey wats wrong wit me simerlies?? //content.invisioncic.com/y282845/emoticons/wow.gif.23d729408e9177caa2a0ed6a2ba6588e.gif

well ill come bak wit somthin betta lata

 

[pj_chevy03 10+ year member]

any1 wanna do battle...i'm up for it